Talk:Emerging Sun (SS Episode)/@comment-1414871-20160407190444

to be honest i seriously didn't get why you only introduced one character's name and then the other- the in-story reason explains that Devon didn't know who "goggles" was until after three or so years working with him, which seems implausible

sure, it was meant as a gag, but like it made no sense to the audience to suddenly name one character and not the other. you describe these characters and then name one of them without cluing people into who's who.

when you introduce a character into the script, they're either named because the audience knows who they are already or you have them or another character namedrop them. the beginning is so mangled up because you named one of them without saying what character it was. i thought devon was supposed to be the point of view character when i thought about it since he was named first, but nothing in the script suggests he is that. none of the script reflects his thoughts or really anything about him that would be exclusive to a point of view character.